In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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# l  F$ |$ h' U* f" [: F4 H+ VIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
- n6 F$ X! Z6 m/ s7 b  iFrom sunset til dawn
/ b, Q+ X% z+ U6 U* NThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
5 d0 `: v; N/ N, a* Z! j  o, m2 oDevoured my sorrow by thee
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! K$ F$ F- s4 _* ~In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
/ \- q/ T2 z$ x6 R$ E) U* fMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
2 Y, P' x  A# u. m0 dYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
# H- a& \3 W# E- S, e3 R; {Through darkness to light
2 B# F$ h% ]/ J/ t' g8 _Nourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

: e3 W; M/ h8 e) M7 s. j( Z2 t眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。

! q' H0 z8 g9 c. a* ?, G+ L  F! O加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
1 Y, g* g& L6 F- w$ B4 ^' m写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

& R. \, K/ e) z1 S8 ~# t* A& ]- [五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

8 K- x: u( [9 h% kSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
7 E8 F5 u$ }" r, y2 |; W/ x# O- CShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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4 l. {* T  l- v, P+ fSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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% E- c; [& b+ m. HThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
# W/ [' V' P% d+ V$ Athee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

6 X9 M2 o& E; Q) K0 j诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
3 A6 z/ ^, t: C* ]+ ?thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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3 U! B9 g5 W0 m' D& iShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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% @& j- x3 t6 H" ~; h, ADon't weep at my grave
) K$ G9 }; ^. s6 F" KFor I am not there,
4 _" e! H- ]) v1 mI've a date with a butterfly
- T0 t" c; Y8 B7 l3 m; x7 o4 G" FTo dance on the air.
" x7 ^# r$ u1 e  V5 b: mIf I'm missed, find a flower,
! E8 ^4 L0 R" X/ ]3 n5 vI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
: Q- k3 B% o& V1 DRight next to you.

Don't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
4 D9 ~: a$ {( b* d7 @1 s' Q) }Playing tag with the wind,
1 ^, d, g8 z9 q# {Chasing the thunder
, h/ M3 v' j; |) j8 v, c5 tTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
. t4 \. j" q' h* f# aSwimming in the sea,
4 t- d4 H5 I) ?/ @Enjoying all of nature
  Q6 X1 |5 B# y' |While I'm waiting for thee.