urgent wanna to rent a place

foreava · 发表于 2006-7-7 16:46

i would like to rent an apartment with a single room and living room that is close to UA and i will be moving in in 18 of july. rental should be about 500 covering everything including internet access. if interested please contact me my qq is 595664705

jackliulin · 发表于 2006-7-8 19:34

1）wanna ＝want to,没有用wanna to表达！；而且wanna是口语，书面还是用want to
2) urgent want to?本身表达方式就不对。没有这么说话的。
3)“i would like to rent an apartment with a single room and living room that is close to UA and i will be moving in in 18 of july. rental should be about 500 covering everything including internet access. if interested please contact me my qq is 595664705 ”里头语病及其多。看来还要恨恨补习E文才可以！

foreava · 发表于 2006-7-8 19:43

lol thanks for ur advice,it is fine for advertisement cus it is not writing an essay... as long as one understand wat it means.

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