我是第一次写英语故事，由于我来还没到一年，英语不是很好，请大家别小看我！# d. B; M F+ X, R/ _! H
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T H E S E V E N H O L Y B I R D A N D T H E H U N T E R ; H! l+ h1 n: y1 t ( W2 h: o5 S- U# q/ z) r, {* G % B L8 V$ b; n# h: S7 R7 aA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.This big forest had a small og cain.) j" j! s# Z; `+ g; [0 ]- b
The hunter lived in the log cabin.Every day,birds needed to the forest's lake bath.But one day,the hunter * d3 y# G( v, h4 Y, S" {9 b0 z/ Z
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不写了，先吃些水果！！恩恩！香！！！ 7 v6 f8 ^/ r: O2 d: z $ z! o' r5 w' i' E6 t+ D[ 本帖最后由 dandan1234 于 2007-2-7 21:25 编辑 ]
想法８错，稍微帮你改了1点: h4 a- J: F# N9 b% n8 w ! t o7 s5 i7 G! f2 s T H E S E V E N H O L Y B I R D S A N D T H E H U N T E R , P" ?3 Q; G J h) q" i+ W; p n! _* X' }
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A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest, there was a small log cabin.3 [, p, r/ c9 I1 y0 m5 j3 Q( ~5 L$ |( g# C
A hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter , E+ g2 }. R5 o! F1 osaw the birds.
原帖由 紫色辣椒 于 2007-2-8 21:39 发表5 p6 _' G% P3 w+ h2 v
A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest。 there was a small log cabin.+ w9 D1 V" \' s' X
A hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter ' Z8 {# P! b8 n( U$ E
saw the birds.
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There was a small log cabin, and a hunter was living n there + S+ i( e P. M) q4 ?" P1 a( H& t' B! ^7 |: l- p3 \: S& M
会不会更好呀？我不知道。。可以54的我说 ) v9 Q9 }2 B- l$ |% G# H* L! V" D8 \& |) H6 m6 R
还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？% V/ }! ~# A0 Q3 ~$ |2 u
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ps：54=无视
原帖由 墨林恋 于 2007-2-9 15:45 发表 ; U- a) i( p6 s$ Q& d ) n' u6 t4 ?* R' K0 I+ A% U, F" R2 M3 b- k
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