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A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.This big forest had a small og cain.# j& i: }1 E2 \& G8 H9 q
The hunter lived in the log cabin.Every day,birds needed to the forest's lake bath.But one day,the hunter 7 I b7 ]6 i! v2 B3 |
saw the birds.3 T( V: o) Q' N! w- j- O
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) Y8 U7 y/ A P. p1 f mA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest, there was a small log cabin.2 a# r( B( G# u( A- X S& m* z
A hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter $ P6 q/ W! j" N! ^) L' R: t6 m$ q: d
saw the birds.
原帖由 紫色辣椒 于 2007-2-8 21:39 发表3 \6 ^# M6 P: w% v2 ?
A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest。 there was a small log cabin.' p; ]: i* C" S$ m) O4 Z( m: h
A hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter 8 z2 [6 U) [ ?5 {; W2 B* u/ J4 L
saw the birds.
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还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？& f1 o" ]$ ~8 e7 x( v: C k
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ps：54=无视
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There was a small log cabin, and a hunter was living n there # D, g" M& J$ S& [9 T 7 k" B( L4 r c2 `, C- y X8 F! j- i4 _会不会更好呀？我不知道。。可以54的我说5 V7 |- G% @5 l: x9 z# a- s7 b
6 I3 d2 B+ S; ], `% Y还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？ 6 A* a0 {$ c B1 b, I _7 B( F2 q; c1 x+ V4 X
ps：54=无视
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