我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

# M4 t6 }0 d9 K/ W! j我尊贵的邻居
4 ~6 T0 Z) `8 W- l是我们小区  几十户
8 `, U) u/ n' l2 u唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
1 G# {0 D- |! q8 ^& h白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

) T% @1 o4 Z7 J$ l3 v2 k$ p1 G. Q) z头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
- {. C& I0 y6 g: y& W6 b. L3 ~说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
0 P+ b7 A& ?" g; d唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
% [9 l6 |" Y3 G( U反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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1 S3 K' ]* ]5 r) {2 v1 S英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
# `! z: T0 r1 Q" L3 O2 X$ nis the only first owner of the unit properties
1 _9 o& ]& w6 R4 ?  z4 }; c% [in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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* w( b/ Z2 m( R1 K( V+ VNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
. J5 F, J9 h& V- Kmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
  M2 a9 s+ ^+ [1 Ris just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
5 D$ l% p/ Z7 U' U. W5 U& @before driving her own car;
& c3 i1 c% y) Bshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
7 C% R  d3 N- R: n6 k. |! Yas if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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* R* E% j( c! C- Q  g- v6 hNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
9 L  t2 Q$ N) `4 l# uthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
' a  Z  i" q! q, H8 R6 _4 r) SJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
, Z; t9 D4 G* C2 WHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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  S4 e% o- S2 e" ZHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
, D5 Y1 d9 s1 Y  ]( \9 H# [真的是太像朱镕基了！
% ^% L9 c! y7 lhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

9 z. Z* L  f8 w6 B- @我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。