我是第一次写英语故事，由于我来还没到一年，英语不是很好，请大家别小看我！ : K0 y) ^$ Z" M( `$ W) i 8 U6 |- A1 F! x3 _* U v' j T H E S E V E N H O L Y B I R D A N D T H E H U N T E R4 q l% |/ }, w5 n, r
, s4 e, h$ j. w9 ^8 _ 5 |* n" O* ]) B1 o+ E' aA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.This big forest had a small og cain. 1 W8 a9 s( Z- q9 zThe hunter lived in the log cabin.Every day,birds needed to the forest's lake bath.But one day,the hunter 4 U8 r! ~2 A* E* q, w5 Z
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不写了，先吃些水果！！恩恩！香！！！ t3 h/ w! K$ R. q) H; K+ b
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[ 本帖最后由 dandan1234 于 2007-2-7 21:25 编辑 ]
想法８错，稍微帮你改了1点:% _/ y7 Z: ~, k: _
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T H E S E V E N H O L Y B I R D S A N D T H E H U N T E R , J- i& T2 ? c1 ]7 ~# V 4 D. A Q+ ] r( p4 @4 h, v 4 K3 P( r9 W' n8 YA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest, there was a small log cabin. 9 `# G, I/ m5 p, B: EA hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter 6 x+ R9 d J9 qsaw the birds.
原帖由 紫色辣椒 于 2007-2-8 21:39 发表 9 f3 p. h2 i) x: ]. e' R$ m, CA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest。 there was a small log cabin. ' |+ o0 g0 N. ]7 s. g. Y; @: tA hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter / p1 ]8 ?2 Z9 h+ g4 A8 A+ S) v( osaw the birds.
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1 [6 h0 T5 u1 O9 T& K) ?会不会更好呀？我不知道。。可以54的我说0 ~: ~$ M" S. h
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