我是第一次写英语故事，由于我来还没到一年，英语不是很好，请大家别小看我！ * B. t9 |+ y; u. Y" t, E8 ?: }6 k$ I2 P& G7 x; R0 V
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A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.This big forest had a small og cain.2 e9 }( R/ [" p: z% R) T8 N3 c, l
The hunter lived in the log cabin.Every day,birds needed to the forest's lake bath.But one day,the hunter 0 W+ n% i7 Q' d/ Dsaw the birds." `5 X" O- F. C7 z# \6 Y* a8 [ j
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不写了，先吃些水果！！恩恩！香！！！ 8 _/ F5 g# n. _' ] . ]4 L8 A! \/ H. M1 R[ 本帖最后由 dandan1234 于 2007-2-7 21:25 编辑 ]
想法８错，稍微帮你改了1点: - d) e1 {5 d# \& I- }$ S0 `+ r" l. \0 P; @; A+ h
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A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest, there was a small log cabin. 3 E+ V# g4 p4 @6 [/ {" L3 bA hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter & T5 c) J- p; t; f5 k; Q, P$ Usaw the birds.
原帖由 紫色辣椒 于 2007-2-8 21:39 发表8 [2 B- ^/ e! n
A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest。 there was a small log cabin.4 R# W: }5 J8 X1 N5 B5 v0 f0 t
A hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter # H$ Q: M6 X: X5 B, k% G
saw the birds.
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还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？ ' t: T1 X: {% p9 R* \5 @5 i5 ?! c: T
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原帖由 墨林恋 于 2007-2-9 15:45 发表 3 s' z, V) u. d: c; _ R2 H1 E% C3 N1 E3 }/ u7 _) f: D
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There was a small log cabin, and a hunter was living n there & ?1 E5 Q/ I x. F, V, Y , ^1 P4 B: k" S会不会更好呀？我不知道。。可以54的我说$ @2 H( S2 R) F7 E, w
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还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？3 _9 `( \* z" ~( y5 S
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