【五周年征文】The layer

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【五周年征文】诗歌一首，根据Stanley Kunitz的诗歌 The layer 改编。
写这个东西就是觉得好玩，现在没法征得Stanley Kunitz他老人家同意了，在此谢谢Stanley Kunitz
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    The layers
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5 T5 q; P! G, q: @: r, FI have walked through many websites,
5 ?2 ^1 u# G6 r/ S# g  e; qsome of them I like,
0 J+ w( S- d/ g8 N4 ?and some of them I do not like.
+ F; A& O) f6 s# H9 ^; O0 W5 s" qOh, Lao Yang have made a tribe
- P; y! e/ y! [0 \, u# {, X) Yout of his true affections.
I go, I go
exulting somewhat,
with my will intact to go
! r9 }% ~' i0 F( v; g$ q) u2 G  xwherever I need to go,
; `3 e# V) O! V5 n: p7 C+ `and every post on the Edmontonchina Community
5 W  a$ M- H: R$ X' }Precious to me.
In my darkest night,
! a2 T+ o% e* n7 B9 X! owhen the moon was covered
and I roamed through websites,
a nimbus-clouded Lao Yang’ voice
directed me:
Live in the layers
not on the litter.
Though I lack the art
to decipher it,
no doubt the next chaper
  j! ?. Z: |. Bin my book of transformations
is already written.
I love to live with Edmontonchina Community.
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原文在此：
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The Layers

' F+ k, p$ y+ X! L2 V7 W8 o7 ?I have walked through many lives,
, D7 K5 N8 f1 D3 k, Jsome of them my own,
# E! B& J0 G1 L% E) R( vand I am not who I was,
though some principle of being
abides, from which I struggle
* `+ f9 j$ o" f+ t9 X: P+ E- hnot to stray.
When I look behind,
as I am compelled to look
before I can gather strength
to proceed on my journey,
I see the milestones dwindling
toward the horizon
" d. \/ Q4 p- b9 F7 k5 Q3 _and the slow fires trailing
from the abandoned camp-sites,
$ p* H* }0 {1 f9 @$ _- E7 ~' l; m) eover which scavenger angels
- _  w3 `; N0 i! b1 n7 j+ \wheel on heavy wings.
( f2 D* t' b0 C# g. V) _. \Oh, I have made myself a tribe
out of my true affections,
and my tribe is scattered!
How shall the heart be reconciled
& d$ E# _5 J* _, I. nto its feast of losses?
- F: p" ]/ u/ W7 V1 dIn a rising wind
the manic dust of my friends,
those who fell along the way,
bitterly stings my face.
Yet I turn, I turn,
6 n( R9 R8 G. b' X4 _* O! e+ aexulting somewhat,
with my will intact to go
5 F7 y) v8 D2 W4 wwhereever I need to go,
and every stone on the road
precious to me.
In my darkest night,
, p% ^# y8 ~1 l. X4 H+ \) lwhen the moon was covered
3 ?: e6 k5 B- T5 Pand I roamed through wreckage,
9 y- M. Y+ j# r3 C: C) ma nimbus-clouded voice
- |1 J, X9 C- E2 T- e$ {2 J( mdirected me:
"Live in the layers,
- j+ B6 g( c# H/ ?8 Ynot on the litter."
! |: I' z4 H+ G5 Q4 Z! D: XThough I lack the art
  @4 b- c4 G4 t" I# b% kto decipher it,
+ n7 k+ L+ s- Q6 Yno doubt the next chapter
: j' ~$ y2 |/ p, b0 tin my book of transformations
9 R/ B& o; G, ]) T& zis already written.
I am not done with my changes.
* e6 q0 E8 s8 D; D, V  D7 e% E—Stanley Kunitz
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: s: s6 Y# P1 l' Y$ i( M2 k% J6 e[ 本帖最后由 betterbest 于 2009-3-31 13:31 编辑 ]

沧海月明

betterbest

谢谢版主，能给点花鼓励鼓励吗

小熊之家

你如果用杨氏英语写成，估计老杨就能看懂了，呵呵

小柔

这篇征文好强.

竟陵残雪

好诗，送花—— 一句也不认识，只知道有老杨，还有他的中文网~~~~~~~

朝阳

原帖由 小熊之家 于 2009-3-31 19:38 发表
你如果用杨氏英语写成，估计老杨就能看懂了，呵呵

. L2 V0 k+ o  L老杨已经精通除了杨氏英语的英语了。

红魔杖

沧海月明

原帖由 betterbest 于 2009-3-31 19:24 发表
/ E4 ?7 L! ?6 O! r* J/ z) A! k谢谢版主，能给点花鼓励鼓励吗

, r( t& @2 N' J7 B7 K' N2 k没问题，送花~~~要常来哟~~支持原创~~~

betterbest

谢谢斑竹，我一直想把它译成中文，但觉得自己的能力翻译不好