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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!1 K) q/ i' \! ]# i5 x
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In the garden of my heart
: ~" ]3 x' J/ N- QYou planted a tree
( V) t* N% r/ uFrom sunset til dawn3 _% e+ w/ P- x7 W  Q
Through darkness to light
3 ^. s# s# G2 |# R7 _' Y$ B7 V5 ]+ [; O7 WNourished with my soul+ E6 j( M5 K; X8 a
Devoured my sorrow by thee. G: L# _/ n* Y: ]0 y; l  _

5 R  E- x5 J' I  `5 Z. EIn the memory of my life- r; ^+ Y  ]8 a$ O
You planted a dream$ O6 f# Q' i) y- ]6 i! Z4 f
Should the sky fall down on me
/ z) u: u$ c. |3 w& jMay promises fade in the sea
+ \/ J- @. N8 F  w4 Z# bSewing back every broken pieces
2 |. E4 t" @3 P, dBursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
+ b% X% m7 a7 c! N$ p9 {' l4 s! X听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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0 H  t& P# j0 C' s+ r4 d! o3 hIn the garden of my heart0 c4 ^( a0 u; u: `  R1 X& D' q; e* G
You planted a tree' d3 U3 R9 {% J& I$ C
From sunset til dawn: \4 I* Z6 p0 y- w9 F
Through darkness to light
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' q# h2 ]( c, W' n' A$ I' kDevoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?  z# S9 Z4 L* Q7 `% e# G* f

7 p( R# d8 V; O( I; n写得真好。8 B  i. W9 B. s4 J

2 W! g+ `8 Y* D& M加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表  |' I% m" J8 X
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?* Y# w- p5 }1 W: j
写得真好。
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
  Q. J: P$ ~) k. H如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

' \8 P' Y6 k' g! |4 P$ U9 i- u五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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! U# w" S9 k/ B) f$ s" vSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
5 e2 J( o2 u9 i  V) ?+ R- Y9 BShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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6 z6 `+ X$ C2 l6 QSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.) ?$ V( z6 M& o

6 t  S& {- z' p2 L" D8 x3 t# m* S1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly"." f- |6 g" }+ s; _2 C
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
( u# q  y% X* R+ v5 P& V' zthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
' ~/ N: d  X2 C- b3 jthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。6 ^% h; s/ X# ~& _

6 f& n- L7 Q5 ~% v8 RShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave" v" o) k: `* d8 E$ ^
For I am not there,3 W  j9 i* N+ O0 @. r* f4 }
I've a date with a butterfly  |, M' h. m0 u2 J. @
To dance on the air.
2 ^* p3 D  g. J# P# ]0 R5 |8 f  BIf I'm missed, find a flower,
, ?# ~3 S5 Y4 ?" j9 HI'll be there too,
0 @6 M( _1 l# g# x3 g% S  B, u( TSniffing it's fragrance
) h0 x* s) q& [& x" N4 ?  {* W  X$ xRight next to you.% M9 m% i7 ^, k& s4 Y

: l3 I& t2 A/ j' tDon't be sad
- e, }1 m8 q. M7 D* G5 A6 }3 CWhen you remember me,
4 n* o& U6 o" Z+ G$ |4 ~) Y( l; fFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
$ F% h! C7 @( a5 O, wWild and free,. W0 F/ E" y% w
Flirting with the lighting,
; J' z) b) Q4 LPlaying tag with the wind,
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Time and again,
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Swimming in the sea,, r& m  l1 n. U
Enjoying all of nature; a! O4 }, b9 R% K
While I'm waiting for thee.
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