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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!9 o0 B8 Y* g8 [6 t- a6 u0 Y6 A) B! U

+ n7 _4 r4 ]# v4 u. T8 nIn the garden of my heart
% ~1 B6 [3 V" y0 RYou planted a tree
- d3 @/ X; P. H4 Y/ pFrom sunset til dawn, I# a7 c5 E# b* J7 q1 ?5 j, V2 O
Through darkness to light( U5 n$ K7 g; h8 D( B* C
Nourished with my soul, _7 s6 ^" k5 ]
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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! v% {: O2 p7 p! _" p2 R  ~7 ^7 _In the memory of my life
/ u' Q) p0 X( nYou planted a dream( n" n5 w* n& i4 d! _  ?. l
Should the sky fall down on me
2 u4 N% `7 u% EMay promises fade in the sea+ J% q, D7 [- w  Z2 y5 u( a
Sewing back every broken pieces' v$ X4 |8 q! M; i+ O
Bursting the love out of me0 ]  H( x1 J9 M' M

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表0 \# E* j+ X& Z, k  M2 ?- W# D+ R
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!$ S4 o0 `- V4 [0 |. n5 ~
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In the garden of my heart
7 h% {) l0 I0 ]0 s) \) d3 UYou planted a tree
( s1 H* u7 M6 I0 s( ~5 B. \3 uFrom sunset til dawn
- j# s2 M% _9 U4 pThrough darkness to light7 r- w( d: V0 c2 m
Nourished with my soul. f; x/ h+ i9 T. U1 I: i; c+ t4 ?6 [( R
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?9 |3 Y" M  c; r- }  ^: }- R2 \  ~
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写得真好。: j; j0 V: Y" r/ K) Y' S9 Z
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表. Z2 d3 ~6 c: r, ~
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
0 p5 H% s1 _3 U/ e- b/ X2 \! ^! r/ D写得真好。
9 p2 n# L% U2 L% k4 X5 d/ \加精加精!

  G9 v( }3 i: Q  j我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
6 z3 Z7 W0 b% k' C+ P如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.  l4 D+ p3 k1 w3 T2 x5 o& _& ?
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表' X# n! x! f# E7 g) J+ ^! B
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here., _% h- i( R* l9 j5 ^. ?
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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( r' L9 }; v2 dThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said., C5 q9 z8 K1 |9 _2 I# n$ L  g
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".* z$ }* ], O1 u. D
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。4 M1 k' [4 o- d, h7 d

0 [- Y) j( T% @" \4 b0 r$ rShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
7 ?7 A: I% T! t, Rthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。. C& c  L$ A. N( `1 P) j
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表7 B' @# V" q5 ^$ U
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。) f; y( h* K. l$ e

$ I( u. K# R; H# Y2 ~, P1 VShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。0 D, {5 D" ]! m/ b; }

2 L' R3 A2 ~: u) h& |4 [' g比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》# s7 S) f1 J' c' ^! _
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Don't weep at my grave
8 _7 j* B$ R6 P% D+ dFor I am not there,' _  g' X* l; z
I've a date with a butterfly) b, |* F* `6 Q6 w5 |1 n0 J
To dance on the air.
3 ~* q1 l1 J# ]: C- R7 j# d. fIf I'm missed, find a flower,
6 @2 l# X; V2 g) [9 v9 ^5 k* s% NI'll be there too,9 ^* {' S3 `+ Q  v7 a$ ]. Y; t
Sniffing it's fragrance2 F( m7 @7 L% B8 G/ ]& ^$ E! B
Right next to you.! H5 U" I  s) z* I; b
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Don't be sad
% t% a9 L1 B  P9 d) \When you remember me,! w' |8 d7 R  V' g8 Z8 q
For I'm singing in the sunshine,! B' E9 J) j8 Y
Wild and free,
9 C; M+ P* t6 }# I( a7 p) EFlirting with the lighting,7 F$ k, |; Q6 H1 x. N
Playing tag with the wind,% q1 I7 z" W& d5 P
Chasing the thunder
" }7 v8 V  J3 K  X4 I* \+ y8 e. [# e9 QTime and again,
7 J' e& P6 i4 K. o3 TSoaring with the eagle,, m7 s8 {1 a5 v6 ~
Swimming in the sea,1 Y- E7 n- o, Q7 ?: k& ?
Enjoying all of nature
. Q7 ?  K- X9 v9 T$ l' j' AWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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