In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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2 e! K: }7 K1 _- RIn the garden of my heart
; F8 F: w9 S. L* m6 d) F  [You planted a tree
& j( h/ ~& s1 z: x, x- r7 u; H; ]From sunset til dawn
6 r- G" l- U& A+ N: oThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
7 @  J! Y3 {$ WMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
( p2 u* M: _" n; N& j& p$ ^& \Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

7 _/ \+ P7 g% L8 m' c( e% hIn the garden of my heart
) a% q' S. \. |: _* z) k' ]% E8 XYou planted a tree
2 z. ^+ U1 J: w+ f% }From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
* N6 f" S; e( X$ C+ L$ mDevoured my so ...

2 l- p) n7 H( T眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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% O; R" E  a1 |. V0 t写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
" I  t0 q9 w2 P/ m9 E眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
# L4 H' |" a+ I: p) x; y8 l加精加精！

' D/ p' y3 T6 ]我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

6 V- O% [! z7 l0 V5 g/ s3 G五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
1 F' E& W+ X! TShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

. y. R5 c4 |3 e7 ~, J; E4 bSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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% U: x& q  ?" @9 O0 o, [0 {1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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/ `$ A( s. g' K4 ^* B2 q1 @Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

) _" D; D$ e; S% K+ X1 z( M- kShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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" Y. G' x8 [. F8 B) e* F诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
& n, v$ r0 I& H, C; @& wthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

4 c" k9 ?- _% n$ h: Z7 u1 eShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

# n* T" L6 Y  m# x, `1 L, j" Z" B" r- p有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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' ]; W  W/ W, w6 d' \  s比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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2 E# c; a( `2 B# r/ sDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
7 `. ^( x6 s0 {, ^To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
% y" q( z) h# a# t* k- ^! B& @* W0 oI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
$ f* [4 A  j) lRight next to you.
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$ ~1 {+ X: x! _- j4 R% k+ G( qDon't be sad
7 G/ {+ o6 b& w' F: FWhen you remember me,
+ H* }! n2 |3 R3 O/ O4 E6 Q$ WFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
! z$ x5 a3 i% B8 ?& q  v; ?- H$ iWild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
: ?1 A* g' p3 |* i5 gChasing the thunder
5 x  @, Y) ?; }' RTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
+ K6 c) p. P4 i/ q) S4 rEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.