In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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7 g- i, ~4 r* p+ B  K0 s% H! JIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
2 Z" U' R# E5 u: f1 A( H- u- w/ PYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
6 z( m2 B$ w. m- h& XMay promises fade in the sea
$ ^1 h7 f! |$ a* t' u: ^, gSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
/ }; L8 i# M( \+ A/ Y) D( V6 y2 Q- ?听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
: P% m! P. [, F7 R. H7 E! AYou planted a tree
2 A: l  `. e0 R- `9 Z. C1 ~From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

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; Z" Z: ~  }- B1 Y* G眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

% W+ f  T& k; b0 n. u' V写得真好。
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加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
4 b  y# x& v* d; @  r8 ]加精加精！

$ E. G' [- e+ V, T5 q/ h" L我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

2 Y8 k6 ?/ j. u* k五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

& u" _, E: V" ?, `2 ^! ESewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
2 z. F/ S- C9 H" z1 }  z8 hShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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; b5 b- w& z. k3 r/ v& s2 UThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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! N% D9 V: c* d* C- O2 \+ [1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

# b, r) C) n- l' |- K2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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3 F, X0 n( E) h" s8 }6 vShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

/ P3 V# Z8 S' j5 VShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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7 a, T( k) P1 b9 l; l2 u: l诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
8 }; y/ E# |- z) o1 n; e3 Othee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

0 v* E) L" u5 x0 Y7 s- m1 lDon't weep at my grave
6 _* P8 `+ ]' V! F5 LFor I am not there,
! y: i1 Q# f9 l( V/ G% F' oI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
% ?& s* e6 {3 _1 t! j, H4 yIf I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
* }% |' ]) s0 WSniffing it's fragrance
+ ]) L  S& m0 i- cRight next to you.
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Don't be sad
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4 `4 C% A. `% K( DFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
) i0 B: d& W, n, e0 q1 vFlirting with the lighting,
- @# Z# B* J7 l: i/ E4 V% EPlaying tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
% A" d) u/ @5 DTime and again,
. l( R: E- O& T2 Y" L) j4 BSoaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.