我是第一次写英语故事，由于我来还没到一年，英语不是很好，请大家别小看我！ * d0 m+ ?! L3 b+ F' F: n+ c ) `: D; a- S/ o! R! ~* r T H E S E V E N H O L Y B I R D A N D T H E H U N T E R9 m3 N. p( ~6 q: Y( m! T( `9 g
5 A. X3 s {+ p; q$ }4 V& e: ? 9 W H' `) K* `6 Q ^/ P( dA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.This big forest had a small og cain. 0 I& q1 J, ^0 ]7 A$ m2 n/ [! uThe hunter lived in the log cabin.Every day,birds needed to the forest's lake bath.But one day,the hunter , `/ Z1 L" r% j5 h. Q
saw the birds.% o. P! q! c/ S" b" X) w1 E4 ~, Y; z
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+ w2 j3 e E8 l' O& v: Q& e/ C不写了，先吃些水果！！恩恩！香！！！ ' |1 P+ D4 Z- k 5 g0 ]0 {8 ^+ g[ 本帖最后由 dandan1234 于 2007-2-7 21:25 编辑 ]
想法８错，稍微帮你改了1点: & ^* B! D$ }2 o1 B, g8 D$ S9 Z0 T - O" g$ ?6 c! P' U T H E S E V E N H O L Y B I R D S A N D T H E H U N T E R 6 y9 o6 S, q! S3 d9 R! ?$ u/ J+ ]9 u4 v
+ J* H1 M! H/ A* lA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest, there was a small log cabin. ' i$ e- d0 O. C' EA hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter 9 q2 r& {+ z; Q, D+ ]saw the birds.
原帖由 紫色辣椒 于 2007-2-8 21:39 发表' ~1 R; G1 b* m7 z! F5 H; {
A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest。 there was a small log cabin. $ I4 C' w* h2 y% t/ g4 H; G2 AA hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter ( k5 g7 I. A- ]5 ] e/ ~saw the birds.
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There was a small log cabin, and a hunter was living n there% b0 F( w* v/ v4 E) D
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会不会更好呀？我不知道。。可以54的我说8 A2 O# \! I. m* g5 m" |; e
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还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？ / [% p) C$ W4 e5 h! ~4 T! Z# c3 ^2 \; n4 O8 d" Q+ i; Z4 W; e
ps：54=无视
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