Falling in love& H; R; x$ {& l! [, }
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I fell in love with you 5 R$ ^ V0 c& R1 }/ E+ G$ e& N- V
At the first week we met 3 N8 h$ d4 U& B7 W : V# b, Y! f" O& p5 V$ A; p2 AYou have charm, you have looks $ \* P4 k/ z9 F2 Y8 i' G u, Fwith full of pimples in face+ b& k5 {/ \+ l. g* J
As spotting sky at a summer night . x! D/ V$ f$ F+ R6 HThey are shining stars( ?. @& x! X- M/ L% X
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Your lip is so big, [7 Z& i: M$ C9 U4 l5 U
And that’s good for a kiss: I: Y) |3 X. o8 S8 Q& k D
Your body is chubby- t4 ?; _& L* g% c
And that is good for sex , Z( H1 B" x6 t6 I5 ~4 M' `5 M9 V4 I0 L0 T% X3 r1 R
I was deeply in love7 }, \% v3 O) i a
Everything from you is positive ; |2 ?1 R% T# ^You blame me everything and everyday / \ f! E6 V, k4 w* L/ U8 eAnd I think all girls sound like 3 ]$ H& ?2 D) M2 M# W( c) X4 [3 d* A) s5 e, I! T3 N6 y
You could not stand my eating/ q; N8 g/ P# b% e
Saying no good for making funny sound( {6 |7 d+ ^4 O" |- z
I think you are perfectly right % a2 g G/ @5 ]( v. KEating with sound is a pig ; Y* Z" ~+ J* M# n1 Q : W* c( c+ z' J- G# A( M4 rI fell in love with you * s& _8 z* ]6 l0 c" O1 v$ FBecome a fool to think& h0 l" V5 M8 n! P
All trouble things you did & [/ S+ z' f& F* I* V) t1 h9 [: mAnd that is the price for love9 P8 F" ?. E. q5 e. \ x$ }
' {- H [9 Y9 k6 V9 nyou are deeply in love, a6 r. }) o0 I
Everything from me is negative 9 |/ {5 k w3 z- W2 u"My man should be like this,8 c9 S7 g1 O: j$ n% R3 ^5 `
and I am helping you to improve'3 N" O7 v) {1 g/ `; ]; P" }
; }4 \: @9 B' }8 yYou are loving me ' {7 `+ ]4 c# m3 u4 {) m
or that one in your mind?. f1 S- H3 {: E6 P( f m' C
My mind is like a mud 0 |" Y: ~2 j3 S4 T J' j+ Scan be shaped whatever you want 0 u' i9 Z% K& n : S9 A( S' V, w# w8 K6 k6 iunfortunalety not my heart ; K3 t* b' [# m& p$ cIt is slashed by you , r: k% w [) Y& K7 F }7 K- |" _and I am seriously hurt 9 r7 ~; Q# @6 _+ k C7 r! D8 h; D+ I( R$ L3 n1 I
I will never love another " S% f9 `; m, @If my heart can be fixed
sweeite, ; j" G6 X( w" K! T* b1 k
i am sorry to say that ur poem sucks.5 E% B+ i' q5 I1 |1 v- u8 k6 [
And this is something I change. Whatever left r too sucky to be changed/ b$ ]5 l( p. K* ~: \- a$ s
4 Q$ }! Q. a+ V5 t+ ^1 dwith the charm, ) B: g% M2 }$ m- V+ V& B8 vwith the simles. , l3 l! |4 {8 n/ {6 f) tI fell in love with you 4 X$ W/ k! g/ W2 t
In the first sign. 4 \$ l2 E8 T3 ^7 HAs spotting sky at a summer ! u/ `6 l+ h) I, M4 k# [6 I
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Your lip is so soft . y+ q& d, |& U; C3 H1 \ T( b. h9 Tthere is not honey can sweeter than ur kiss ; M& I8 u. F+ i, a$ u2 V7 _5 cYour body is so sexy* w; l: U1 R# B) Y' w. m
And I cannt image the moment I touch u. , o/ r, L. N% c& a2 Y* a1 ~) A# ?# s0 U/ Y+ A% c# i/ f
I am deeply in love 0 Y+ a1 b% |. `& F- |Everything from you is so charming& u: O& n, V# p% f3 }
although You r so picky for me 8 ]- x3 v* p) _/ [4 o! I3 OAnd I take them as ur buttefly feelings.
THis is the poem in SNTC S2 and it is not a good one 2. , u' Q- F4 s d q& l8 o0 `# RBut u can copy the way how she ranges the poem, I# s1 s, M ~2 L5 j* v
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His hello is the end of her endings * m* S, t* ?; }+ w+ W, V0 @3 GHer laugh is their first step down the aisle4 r3 W/ n7 d! R6 t' {
His hand would be hers to hold forever$ a8 ~, E2 |1 ?1 G
His forever is simply as her smile 6 B+ S* f9 g! E" ?. o/ O
He said she was what was missing- H) Z4 J8 X7 C1 |
She said instantly she knew 2 O9 J6 o. m& UShe was a question to be answered$ }% j' Z& K c* U9 [
And his answer is 8 I, Q; q3 I6 \
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Rain bow, you are so right. You improved it , and now it is much better. Seems you also like poems. that is good and wish to keep in touch with each other. Merry Xmas! h8 _) t* U7 X& b
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Below is my new one, any comment?
It’s amazing how I felt ; _7 k$ ^ [5 ?$ d. M" S; l7 k7 c0 v$ E6 z; F/ j' W4 a4 t: S
It's amazing how I felt ) W9 [8 y, T2 g( @- W, r
when I was with you3 w" J4 R) I d# ~
My heart beat so fast 2 ]) p2 V/ X. k3 {& ~I looked at you and thought * ~" K; O/ c3 D. X( tHoly Jesus, you were so cute6 ~, D6 L0 a! y- o
* y' ^ l+ O5 C5 JYou left me without a word! H6 j9 D3 w2 \. }6 D
I have nothing except my emptiness# Z& e% H% i. s
My mood is like a cloud8 U) M( d j: c9 r. _, S d7 U
How could it be dispersed? 0 n; o# W L( q" F8 o# f5 D5 P2 A1 n" i; Z0 J, X' U4 O; ?+ Z2 g
Feelings bite my heart 6 S8 K" w! b+ v0 l- b" c
You are the right one I wait ! u7 b2 ^ Q0 S+ D% N1 vIn the depth of my soul 5 W% H+ w9 N7 J( MI will love you till I'm dead