我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
" g% v6 @' H0 w/ {4 ~+ {& Z是我们小区  几十户
6 }7 p6 b4 _, v$ r, Z+ _& q唯一的元老
8 f5 ^: G7 }3 Z8 |8 H3 p* h3 {1 Y一住三十多年
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0 g3 i+ }! ~: M- c邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
' T, Q- n1 @) H白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
( L8 W/ K8 [8 c1 [+ [似不识  岁月为何物
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& y" n/ g* C6 |1 v头顶英国文学硕士的光环
  j2 H9 [2 e/ y9 F4 B" G9 }邻居气宇轩昂
4 ~9 }) y) w  \$ j$ \2 }* R如同女面朱熔基
& W' @; W( x7 _& C- A) d邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
# Z6 v& m2 O" |' l: Y. u4 u! b反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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Living here for more than thirty years,
; ~: l1 s" }2 P( A& ~: w7 Dmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
1 B  y, |& P% _in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
; O8 h8 ]0 q$ ~; @2 v+ qmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
* c/ i1 ~6 v) L! }is just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
  {# `7 Z* J; x' c8 Z8 mbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
# r' j6 f8 g) `  ~2 kto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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, W: t" c( J7 S, L/ V6 @0 RWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
/ [$ B& ~# L6 a( m; A0 E* Y+ _neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
/ _9 T) T4 B3 d& X# S; ^Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
4 c, O) c( o+ O8 K" J, R+ Z$ Linterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
3 g- {' g* z+ J/ d1 Ithe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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8 |. I" }+ q+ e1 t( MHer light-footed movement
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hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
+ V: f2 [6 k& a. [4 s! b真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。