In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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  g% t, ]0 M4 F6 r1 z& b" ^In the garden of my heart
) P) P& k& ^# Z9 p& [8 OYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
* }  M; l" L+ l3 J7 H# S" bMay promises fade in the sea
/ q1 B: w# M" B  uSewing back every broken pieces
: \0 `+ r1 \. g8 Y7 V; @$ v& r# {$ DBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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$ U  I* B0 ~9 J- }7 j3 tIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
" t0 S1 I; w3 `* U1 T, _From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
  l7 I5 G$ m& {* b& SDevoured my so ...

6 d# q6 g2 g; i眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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* o! {* q7 g3 n4 z' k写得真好。

2 e: g8 F  j& y% K3 g加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
9 q: C$ M) w) B眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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, ?4 C/ U  D8 I8 [1 g  }& T$ ~Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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  l1 L; x3 {+ ]Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

1 s" t+ |% c" S4 Q$ SThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

9 {" L, c, K3 I: @# p7 W1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

0 F8 R/ i. S0 b# `, R8 A! \7 x2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

9 w+ R4 e6 U! _- y6 IShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

+ t$ V' s4 b7 C/ _1 [# m4 R5 c* }Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

0 h: L( s  U5 T  E9 e9 H有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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  u  A$ n$ q$ |. c& {Don't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
+ n+ g& w+ s$ B2 _2 EI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
$ N% Z3 x+ ?8 W/ ]& c5 L" mIf I'm missed, find a flower,
; Z7 O  t2 v$ C' q3 KI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

$ o  D" q6 u! \1 k: l5 H( d2 y' u1 L) UDon't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
% i0 B: P7 p% e7 d( BWild and free,
* c6 J# L& Z& x9 X9 FFlirting with the lighting,
. Z- A  N3 r7 gPlaying tag with the wind,
8 @+ I1 ]/ T( c, m0 s! qChasing the thunder
  R6 k; I) O$ Y" q& B/ ?Time and again,
" `/ E1 U. H2 H  hSoaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
0 z& y, B4 L% ?Enjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.