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$ p8 o% y4 E# b& H; b& ^6 f( b" EA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.This big forest had a small og cain. + M H" B' L" v jThe hunter lived in the log cabin.Every day,birds needed to the forest's lake bath.But one day,the hunter " q; p6 ~" i4 J! Esaw the birds. 2 m+ q z! Z, E% ?9 u$ Z# w% |0 t! u [
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% I, l0 `- @" U. C: d. O% A- T s9 _A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest, there was a small log cabin. 6 |; K4 c; Y; t- ~9 B" E1 tA hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter `: u7 U4 \4 e" R* u. d! jsaw the birds.
原帖由 紫色辣椒 于 2007-2-8 21:39 发表# Y( P0 F, Q9 u* X
A long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest。 there was a small log cabin.7 N5 B) M+ a( \* r. s9 g
A hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter ( C9 h: k7 }4 c9 B3 y1 g" s
saw the birds.
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There was a small log cabin, and a hunter was living n there0 Z2 p0 x2 w; P1 B9 U' \" m5 }
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会不会更好呀？我不知道。。可以54的我说 + c4 _) d# S1 U z 8 q( B: K2 ]) d- ?+ y4 h% P还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？ 3 `& Y' \/ r' |, o+ X7 M. l* ` $ D# L5 h5 z g6 Cps：54=无视
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